Seven secrets of stylish academic writing

Imagine that the editor of a widely-read magazine or, say, The Conversation has heard about your academic research and invited you to contribute an article. But you only know how to produce stodgy, impersonal papers for peer-reviewed disciplinary journals. How do you undo years of scholarly training…

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Imagine that the editor of a widely-read magazine or, say, The Conversation has heard about your academic research and invited you to contribute an article. But you only know how to produce stodgy, impersonal papers for peer-reviewed disciplinary journals.

How do you undo years of scholarly training and learn to write like a human being?

It’s a dilemma many academics face when engaging with print or online media for the first time, so here are seven tips to turn your jargon into energetic prose that anyone can understand.

Start with the title

The titles of academic articles are typically abstract, technical, and utterly uninviting, such as:

“Social-Organizational Characteristics of Work and Publication Productivity among Academic Scientists in Doctoral-Granting Departments”

To send a more welcoming signal to potential readers, try phrasing your title as a question (“Why Are Some Scientists More Productive Than Others?”), a provocative statement (“Productivity Hurts”), a metaphor (“Productivity: Holy Grail or Poisoned Chalice?”) or other memorable phrase (“The Productivity Paradox”).

Wherever possible, opt for simple, concrete language.

“Snakes on a Plane” is an inviting title; “Aggressive Serpentine Behaviour in a Restrictive Aviation Environment” is not.

Follow with an opening hook

“Scientific work takes place in organisations that may either facilitate or inhibit performance and within a larger, social community of science that may limit, constrain, or stimulate the development of ideas and actions.”

Yawn – you’ve already lost us. Follow up your engaging title with an opening paragraph that contains a question, quotation, anecdote or description: a vivid scene, a surprising fact.

Toss your readers into the middle of a story that has already begun.

Tell a story

The stories we like best have real people in them. Consider making yourself the central character in a tale of academic challenge and discovery.

Alternatively, find another human face to focus on: the cancer patient helped by a new treatment, the student who confronted and overcame a conceptual roadblock, the artist who struggled to find an appropriate aesthetic form for conveying the horrors of war.

With practice, you can learn to craft an equally compelling story featuring non-human characters: seagulls, red blood cells, a theorem, a text.

Be human

Remember you are a human being writing for other human beings.

Whether or not you employ the personal pronoun “I”, cultivate an authoritative yet conversational voice that invokes confidence and trust.

Read a few paragraphs aloud to yourself or to a friend. Do your sentences sound as though they’ve been produced by a robot? Or can you hear a real person speaking?

Be concrete

Academics typically traffic in abstract language. Readers, however, grasp abstract concepts best when they are grounded in the physical world.

Martin Luther King Jr’s “I Have a Dream” speech vividly illustrates this principle:

“I have a dream that one day on the red hills of Georgia, the sons of former slaves and the sons of former slave owners will be able to sit down together at the table of brotherhood.”

King invokes a colourful landscape (the red hills of Georgia), stocks it with human characters (the sons of former slaves and the sons of former slave owners) and gives those people something to do (sit down together at the table).

Not until the end of the sentence does he deliver the abstract noun at its heart. Brotherhood, King shows us, is not just an empty ideal but a place, an action, a shared meal.

Vary your verbs

Verbs are the batteries that power your sentences. Flat, predictable verbs produce flat, predictable prose:

“The focus of archaeological research on technology as an adaptation has, according to some, removed technologies from the historical circumstances in which they came into existence.”

Active verbs, by contrast, supply vigour and verve:

“Insects suck, chew, parasitize, bore, store, and even cultivate their foods to a highly sophisticated degree of specialization.”

Verbs pack their strongest punch when they directly follow a noun and when both agent and action can be clearly identified.

Compare the subject-verb cores of the two sentences above: “The focus … has … removed” (what is this sentence really about?); “Insects suck, chew, parasitize, bore, store, cultivate” (you can practically see those ravenous insects swarming).

Sweat the details

Writing baggy, lazy prose is easy; writing clear, lively prose is hard. Stylish academic writers hone and polish their sentences until they gleam.

They are ruthless about eliminating clutter (“From an analysis of the resulting data it can be seen that …”) and meticulous about word choice, syntax and flow. They work hard on their writing so their readers won’t have to.

These “secrets”, of course, are not secrets at all; they are core principles of effective written and oral communication. Put them under your pillow and breathe them into your dreams.

Whatever your subject matter or audience, they will help you energise your lectures, sharpen your grant applications, and produce more consequential research.

Helen Sword’s new book, Stylish Academic Writing, is published by Harvard University Press. You can find out if your own writing is “flabby or fit”, by running a few samples of your work through the Writer’s Diet test.

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16 Comments sorted by

  1. Mat Hardy

    Lecturer in Middle East Studies at Deakin University

    An excellent piece with sound advice. As my old journalism teacher used to say: "Your lead par needs a hook, a heart and a promise."

    I think though one of the barriers is getting it past the old guard...the sort of people who have an existential crisis because you've used a word that's "too literary". Somebody on here a couple of months ago was explaining about how their supervisor came down on them because they described something as "the sole protein that..." (or something) instead of "the only protein".

    Now I'm off to write my paper on "Sub-aquatic production of load-bearing vegetable fibre matrices in the Gulf of Tadjoura region".

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    1. Mat Hardy

      Lecturer in Middle East Studies at Deakin University

      In reply to Roger Davidson

      Underwater basket weaving in Djibouti. But which title so you think would be more likely to get a run at a conference?!

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    2. Jim Codde

      Health Service Planner

      In reply to Mat Hardy

      Too true. But which title is most likely to get an audience? It's tough to find the line between scientific credibility and greater readership.

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  2. Mandy Lupton

    Lecturer in education

    Helen, I bought your book a few weeks ago and read it from cover-to-cover in one sitting! I laughed, I cringed, and I turned each page in trepidation that you would use some of my writing as an example of unstylish and flabby writing! Phew - I was lucky this time around, but shall endeavour never to write unstylishly again :)

    Thank you for a great read, it has changed the way I think about my writing :)

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  3. Dale Bloom

    Analyst

    I have wondered whether to comment on this article, but thought it would be self-evident, so I didn’t.

    However, it seems no one else has picked it up, so I thought it might be appropriate to comment. What is missing from the seven tips: reliability, truthfulness, and fact, not fiction.

    What is the use of academic literature if it is no better than what can be found in an opinion column?

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    1. Howard Williams

      Lawyer

      In reply to Dale Bloom

      "What is the use of academic literature if it is no better than what can be found in an opinion column?"

      Exactly right Dale. We should be aiming to make opinion columns more like academic literature, not the other way around.

      For example, Prof Sword recommends the heading “Snakes on a Plane” over “Aggressive Serpentine Behaviour in a Restrictive Aviation Environment”. But what she apparently fails to recognise is that these two headings have entirely different meanings.I can imagine many circumstances…

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  4. Steve Hindle

    logged in via email @bigpond.com

    How much knowledge has not been passed on due to poor communication skills?
    I actually get angry when I work hard to decipher a sentence only to find the argument behind it is simple. Sometimes I wonder if the writer is trying to hide behind gobbledygook because they don't have confidence in their own ideas.

    An excellent piece Helen.

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    1. Dale Bloom

      Analyst

      In reply to Steve Hindle

      Agreed, and in a well constructed paragraph, the reader should be able to read the first sentence, and that first sentence should tell the reader what the rest of the paragraph is about. The first sentence should also contain main keywords.

      This makes it easy for note taking, and it would make it much easier for students if academic text was written in such a style.

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    2. Regan Forrest

      logged in via Twitter

      In reply to Steve Hindle

      I agree Steve. As a PhD student I frequently find texts I struggle with. It can be hard to tell sometimes whether this is down to my failure to grasp the argument, or that it's been written to sound more complicated than it really is.

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  5. Geoffrey Marnell

    Documentation consultant and university lecturer

    Excellent advice, although the suggestion to prefer active verbs needs to be tempered a little. Can you imagine how dreary, say, the Materials and Methods section of a scientific paper would be if every sentence was written in the active voice (that is, with the agent specified as the grammatical subject)? "The experimenter added the acid to the beaker. The experimenter warmed the acid. The experimenter then measured the specific gravity. The experimenter then zzzzzz." The agentless passive is called for here, not merely to keep the reader awake, but for the worthy goal of efficient communication.

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  6. Margaret Rose STRINGER

    retired but interested

    I've edited the odd few PhD theses, and been dismayed at the formulaic construction of a very great number thereof.
    This article is interesting and constructive; but my (limited) experience of the field of thesis writing convinces me that most wannabe PhDs can be offered as much interesting and constructive advice as exists and they will stick doggedly to the 'rules' they've been given.
    Who can blame them? - they've been instructed along certain lines, which, by and large, constrict their creative activities to telling markers what they're going to read, providing the reading and then telling them what they've just read.
    Operating under apparently inflexible guidelines of this nature, what hope is there for original thinking?

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    1. Nick Stafford

      writer

      In reply to Margaret Rose STRINGER

      Thanks Helen for an interesting piece.

      Reminds me a lot of an essay by the American sociologist Harry Levine who pointed out that students always remember the case studies, not the concepts. But if you put an abstract concept into a case study, students grasp it quickly and remember it.

      As a sociologist I am dismayed at the amount of jargon ridded drivel that my profession has produced over the years. I have yet to read a sociological theory that I couldn't comprehend, but plenty that I could…

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  7. Gavin Moodie

    Principal Policy Adviser

    As I read this piece, Sword is not commenting on writing for scholarly journals, but on reporting research for lay audiences. Nonetheless, I disagree with some of her advice.

    While I agree that most journalism seeks to engage feelings, I do not think this is a good trait. I suggest that academics should try to improve popular understanding by positing positions from strong arguments based on solid evidence, not by appealing to personal impressions and feelings.

    That is, while academic writing is flawed and certainly isn't a good model for other writing, it has some features which should be transferred to other writing.

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  8. Howard Williams

    Lawyer

    I'm not sure the disclosure statement on this page is accurate. Surely Prof Helen Sword "work[s] for ... or receive[s] funding from" Harvard University Press? And surely Harvard University Press is a "company or organisation that would benefit from this article", given the overlap between the contents of this article and the book by Prof Sword that HUP has published (as well as the advertisement at the bottom of the article)?

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  9. Gerald Officer

    Lab rat

    Good research mines bulk ore & provides nuggets, concentrate, & products. Should this then be blended with pretty & fragrant delicacies, those who don't have the time to re-mine & re-refine, will walk away, either to a clean source, or to some fiction aisle.

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